[SlugLUG] Linux Is Not A Desktop Solution

[Vasily Koroslev]

Rohan,

While I have issues with much of what you say in the piece, I think it 
is stuff which others will point out, and want to limit my feedback to 
two points of writing style:

1) The 'voice' used in your piece seems a bit confused; in the first 
paragraph I felt as though you were attempting to introduce the OS 
landscape to someone who is (very) unfamiliar with operating systems, 
yet in the rest you mention things like WINE without any explanation.  
Who is the audience for this?

2) There are no citations for any data given, or even a rough idea of 
where any of it comes from.  If this is meant to be more of an Op/Ed 
piece a la "I, Cringley" (http://www.pbs.org/cringley) it is a bit more 
forgivable; but it's is still nice to give us readers an idea of where 
you are getting these things from.

Regards,
V

Rohan Sheth wrote:

>Here's a little piece which I have been working on this past week.  I'd
>love some feedback on changes before I ask an IRC-Buddy to have to
>posted on SlashDot.
>
>Thanks!
>--Rohan
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